electronic - looking for constructive criticism

[rakim87]

https://soundcloud.com/jasper_atoms/beat
I haven't actually even named this song yet, it's not finished by any means. I just want to see what type of reactions it gets.
Thanks!

[BlueGreene]

I haven't listened to this on my system, but, the bass is WAY too high for sure.

[rakim87]

I think I like the bass where it is actually, but thanks.

[CoreyJayzMusic]

for some reason it says the song can't be played at this time, for me.

[CoreyJayzMusic]

yeah i got it working i don't know what happened maybe a wifi issue or something, i think the track is a littler boring, not much movement but i really liked that transition at 1:19 but it only lasted for what felt like a second, i think a nice melody on top would really bring that track to life, i could hear it in my head, i think thats all it really needs.

i just got an idea, if you think u might wanna send the track to me and maybe i could lay something down, we could go back and forth with it, could be fun.

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