time synopsis
- the very very very first notes are too busy.
- the bass is panned to the right, put it in the middle.
- whole mix is to the right.
- nice break at 3:42
- good track, ending is fine
I like this stuff!! overall sounds like a good mix, just off center.
I'm high
- also sounds panned to the right. I swapped my headphones around, yep it's panned to one side.
- cool trippy song.
- 10 minutes?!??! cool, it works, good writing.
running
- this one doesn't sound as well mastered as the others. it lacks mids.
- the melodic pad (almost stab-like) is pretty lo-fi, it drags the mix down. good sound, could be clearer, crisper.
- 5:00 - total breakdown, interesting, sounds like another song is playing. on the floor people might think the DJ played a song out to silence to start another one. the break might go too low. up to you.
- you do like writing long songs.

no matter, they work.
sunshine
- nice mellow track
- like the break at ~6:00 ending in "sunshine..."
OH YEAH, this is myspace. myspace sucks, always sounds like crap, these sound better than most. put these up on Sound Cloud, myspace is dead anyway.
Club Me-
(listening while I work...)
- that synth line gets repetitive, dominates the song too much. nice breaking it up a bit, maybe do more.
Beyond Our Sun
- trippy track.
- the kick drum could use a little more presence.
- this one isn't as polished as the others. the pads are a bit too lo-fi. then again, myspace audio quality blows.
systemic contradiction
- 0:50 - the bass is at the right level, the other parts are a bit quiet.
- nice build up. overall sounds too quiet.
- it can get cliche to have a 'deep thought' vocal line in a song. I do it too, just saying.
- 6:23 another nice breakdown
- I like this track's basslines.
that's my $0.02, no criticism, just trying to help. tough to give details with so many songs to listen to, that was almost an hour!!! no doubt you can write songs, these all have nice breaks, build ups intro and outros. it's hard to tell through myspazz but maybe just some practice producing tracks and you're your own hit machine and production company.
