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I figure with the success of the whole Walter White & Jesse thing, there's a huge appetite for quality programming about a day in the life of an antihero and such.

So basically, my rough plot outline has our protagonist "Corky Baggott", a 41 yr. man who suffers from gout, a club foot and chronic Chron's Disease battered down from a lifetime of ridicule over "little slips here and there" so to speak. Corky is an asst, manager at a Subway and encounters Will-E, a high school dropout and a total social outcast because of a debilitating case of acne. Will-E visits Subway at precisely 1:23 PM everyday to get his usual Tuna on Sesame-Oregano and sits in the corner window seat eating it before his K-Mart stock clerk shift starts.

Anyway, without revealing too much of the plot, Corky and Will-E eventually hook up and plot to take revenge on society as a way to get back at everyone who ever made fun of them. They decide to start a Methane Lab in an abandoned warehouse, and bottle the stuff into portable canisters disguised as fire-extinguishers. Will-E discovers a secret recipe for a particularly noxious Mercaptan compound easily synthesized from In 'n Out Burgers and Nyquil which they introduce into the canisters as a potent additive. Then, by night, they penetrate commercial and government buildings and inject the canister fog into the air handlers of HVAC systems so that their victims will suffer the consequences of persistent noxious vapors upon arriving at work.

I can't really divulge anymore details because I'm in talks with AMC and Fox on production aspects, but this thing is going to be "Da Bomb".

I'm setting my Tivo now, so hurry the fuck up and get this to market, STAT!

LoopStationZebra wrote:I'm setting my Tivo now, so hurry the fuck up and get this to market, STAT!

We're on it! The script is literally flying out of my fingers. I'm working on a piece right now for Episode 5 where a cartel enters the scene. Seems they have one of those "Green" companies marketing a new Fart Harvester as a front for illicit activities and they don't relish the idea of Baggott, who incidentally goes by the street name of 'Kleinfelter', flooding the air with artificial butt frosting. Anyway, there's lots of action 'n shit.

Any sort of ass play involved?

IMHO you CANNOT ever have enough ass play.

LoopStationZebra wrote:Any sort of ass play involved?

IMHO you CANNOT ever have enough ass play.

Yes, but I cannot go into the details at this time. It would take away from the suspense and the advertiser sponsors would get mad. I will add however that we've done a stunning and persuasive job of carefully weaving ass-play, cowbell and oysters into a mesmerizing sequence that will have the entertainment industry talking for days on end.

*drool*

*FAPFAPFAP*

The seedy characters and shitbirds in my series make guys like Gus, Mike and Tuco look like Captain Kangaroo, Mr. Green Jeans and Dancing Bear.

This series was called Baking Bad

^heheh

I don't want to soil your genius Bitchly but it would also be cool if there was a 3rd person in serving as a secret enemy. Something like a subplot where Will-E is mulatto but mostly acts white, so he tries to have street cred by rapping. His pot dealer makes beats, serves as his producer and eventually gets in with their Wind Breaking but only to secrectly serve for his own and/or with another groups purposes (not the cartel, even if he's an enemy, he's also an enemy of the cartel, so it makes it more believable that he's completely loyal).

Also what about some comedic elements involving genetic experiments on sheep and cows for optimal methane extraction? Some mutations from splicing hijinx?

Brilliant, nonetheless. Don't get discouraged if AMC or HBO doesn't like it. It may be too REAL for them.
And don't feel humiliated if FX will take it; it'd be better than SyFy (are they still on the air?)

Ps. This secret antagonist doesn't get found out until like 3rd or 4th season. So we end up thinking of Will-E's producer as like family, or a big brother or father figure, with absolutely no suspicion or clue that he's an enemy; to the point that he puts himself in danger and sacrifices himself on more than one occasion to help them out, so we have no doubt that he's cool.

Like, killer cliffhanger at the end of 3rd season. Over the course through 2nd season we learn that there is a small but growing operation that the government catches onto and eventually contracts for the military and then other industries use them for good, as opposed to our Breaking Wind guys, who are still like the underdog renegades. The Enemy (now dubbed ENEMA, after they become a gubment contracted corporation, like Blackwater) takes out the cartel, making them "the good guys"; then it gets all big in the news that their growing operation is making the world a better place; somehow they've converted the methane into a powerful green fuel (only because it was first accidentally discovered by Corky & Will-E's genetic experiments gone awry),etc.

So, ENEMA's gettin all the love from everyone, saving the world, and Corky & Will-E end up getting busted, (because by 2nd season they are Wind Breaking high school gymnasiums during pep rallies and games (just one example) to the point that there's tri-county investigations going on).

Corky & Will-E try to figure out who's behind ENEMA and who got them busted only to find that it was Will-E's producer. Not sure how, just that at the tail end of the season finale, we either hear his voice or see him revealing himself, and we see the shock on Corky & Will-E's face. Later on I think it should be Corky or Will-E's mom that is the eventual hero saving them and taking out ENEMA, or something like uncovering some horrid, inhumane and illegal practices used as part of their operations that are "making the world a better place" and it gets out to the media (eh, the media part is too cliched).

What would ENEMA be an acronym for? It'd be corporate like. Was hoping this would be helpful Environmental Noxious Exertion Manufacturing Applications? Too heady.

Sorry to hijack, I love this shit. Was that a dick thing to do?

shadx312 wrote:^heheh

I don't want to soil your genius Bitchly but it would also be cool if there was a 3rd person in serving as a secret enemy. Something like a subplot where Will-E is mulatto but mostly acts white, so he tries to have street cred by rapping. His pot dealer makes beats, serves as his producer and eventually gets in with their Wind Breaking but only to secrectly serve for his own and/or with another groups purposes (not the cartel, even if he's an enemy, he's also an enemy of the cartel, so it makes it more believable that he's completely loyal).

Also what about some comedic elements involving genetic experiments on sheep and cows for optimal methane extraction? Some mutations from splicing hijinx?

Brilliant, nonetheless. Don't get discouraged if AMC or HBO doesn't like it. It may be too REAL for them.
And don't feel humiliated if FX will take it; it'd be better than SyFy (are they still on the air?)

Ps. This secret antagonist doesn't get found out until like 3rd or 4th season. So we end up thinking of Will-E's producer as like family, or a big brother or father figure, with absolutely no suspicion or clue that he's an enemy; to the point that he puts himself in danger and sacrifices himself on more than one occasion to help them out, so we have no doubt that he's cool.

Like, killer cliffhanger at the end of 3rd season. Over the course through 2nd season we learn that there is a small but growing operation that the government catches onto and eventually contracts for the military and then other industries use them for good, as opposed to our Breaking Wind guys, who are still like the underdog renegades. The Enemy (now dubbed ENEMA, after they become a gubment contracted corporation, like Blackwater) takes out the cartel, making them "the good guys"; then it gets all big in the news that their growing operation is making the world a better place; somehow they've converted the methane into a powerful green fuel (only because it was first accidentally discovered by Corky & Will-E's genetic experiments gone awry),etc.

So, ENEMA's gettin all the love from everyone, saving the world, and Corky & Will-E end up getting busted, (because by 2nd season they are Wind Breaking high school gymnasiums during pep rallies and games (just one example) to the point that there's tri-county investigations going on).

Corky & Will-E try to figure out who's behind ENEMA and who got them busted only to find that it was Will-E's producer. Not sure how, just that at the tail end of the season finale, we either hear his voice or see him revealing himself, and we see the shock on Corky & Will-E's face. Later on I think it should be Corky or Will-E's mom that is the eventual hero saving them and taking out ENEMA, or something like uncovering some horrid, inhumane and illegal practices used as part of their operations that are "making the world a better place" and it gets out to the media (eh, the media part is too cliched).

What would ENEMA be an acronym for? It'd be corporate like. Was hoping this would be helpful Environmental Noxious Exertion Manufacturing Applications? Too heady.

Sorry to hijack, I love this shit. Was that a dick thing to do?

This reminds me that I need to blow the dust off my “tl;dr” script I’ve been working on. So far it’s a single post-it in length but that might be pushing it. I'm sure there's a few sub plots I could edit out.

Well, it's been a slow day. Good to know you're still alive! You know, it wouldn't hurt to keep your head to the ground.

shadx312 wrote:^heheh

I don't want to soil your genius Bitchly but it would also be cool if there was a 3rd person in serving as a secret enemy. Something like a subplot where Will-E is mulatto but mostly acts white, so he tries to have street cred by rapping. His pot dealer makes beats, serves as his producer and eventually gets in with their Wind Breaking but only to secrectly serve for his own and/or with another groups purposes (not the cartel, even if he's an enemy, he's also an enemy of the cartel, so it makes it more believable that he's completely loyal).

Also what about some comedic elements involving genetic experiments on sheep and cows for optimal methane extraction? Some mutations from splicing hijinx?

Brilliant, nonetheless. Don't get discouraged if AMC or HBO doesn't like it. It may be too REAL for them.
And don't feel humiliated if FX will take it; it'd be better than SyFy (are they still on the air?)

Ps. This secret antagonist doesn't get found out until like 3rd or 4th season. So we end up thinking of Will-E's producer as like family, or a big brother or father figure, with absolutely no suspicion or clue that he's an enemy; to the point that he puts himself in danger and sacrifices himself on more than one occasion to help them out, so we have no doubt that he's cool.

Like, killer cliffhanger at the end of 3rd season. Over the course through 2nd season we learn that there is a small but growing operation that the government catches onto and eventually contracts for the military and then other industries use them for good, as opposed to our Breaking Wind guys, who are still like the underdog renegades. The Enemy (now dubbed ENEMA, after they become a gubment contracted corporation, like Blackwater) takes out the cartel, making them "the good guys"; then it gets all big in the news that their growing operation is making the world a better place; somehow they've converted the methane into a powerful green fuel (only because it was first accidentally discovered by Corky & Will-E's genetic experiments gone awry),etc.

So, ENEMA's gettin all the love from everyone, saving the world, and Corky & Will-E end up getting busted, (because by 2nd season they are Wind Breaking high school gymnasiums during pep rallies and games (just one example) to the point that there's tri-county investigations going on).

Corky & Will-E try to figure out who's behind ENEMA and who got them busted only to find that it was Will-E's producer. Not sure how, just that at the tail end of the season finale, we either hear his voice or see him revealing himself, and we see the shock on Corky & Will-E's face. Later on I think it should be Corky or Will-E's mom that is the eventual hero saving them and taking out ENEMA, or something like uncovering some horrid, inhumane and illegal practices used as part of their operations that are "making the world a better place" and it gets out to the media (eh, the media part is too cliched).

What would ENEMA be an acronym for? It'd be corporate like. Was hoping this would be helpful Environmental Noxious Exertion Manufacturing Applications? Too heady.

Sorry to hijack, I love this shit. Was that a dick thing to do?

Fuck, you are like so hired, brutha! Let me soak on this shit for a few....great potential.

Styles Bitchly wrote:I figure with the success of the whole Walter White & Jesse thing, there's a huge appetite for quality programming about a day in the life of an antihero and such.

So basically, my rough plot outline has our protagonist "Corky Baggott", a 41 yr. man who suffers from gout, a club foot and chronic Chron's Disease battered down from a lifetime of ridicule over "little slips here and there" so to speak. Corky is an asst, manager at a Subway and encounters Will-E, a high school dropout and a total social outcast because of a debilitating case of acne. Will-E visits Subway at precisely 1:23 PM everyday to get his usual Tuna on Sesame-Oregano and sits in the corner window seat eating it before his K-Mart stock clerk shift starts.

Anyway, without revealing too much of the plot, Corky and Will-E eventually hook up and plot to take revenge on society as a way to get back at everyone who ever made fun of them. They decide to start a Methane Lab in an abandoned warehouse, and bottle the stuff into portable canisters disguised as fire-extinguishers. Will-E discovers a secret recipe for a particularly noxious Mercaptan compound easily synthesized from In 'n Out Burgers and Nyquil which they introduce into the canisters as a potent additive. Then, by night, they penetrate commercial and government buildings and inject the canister fog into the air handlers of HVAC systems so that their victims will suffer the consequences of persistent noxious vapors upon arriving at work.

I can't really divulge anymore details because I'm in talks with AMC and Fox on production aspects, but this thing is going to be "Da Bomb".

i remember you from pbnation.

drumrak wrote:

Styles Bitchly wrote:I figure with the success of the whole Walter White & Jesse thing, there's a huge appetite for quality programming about a day in the life of an antihero and such.

So basically, my rough plot outline has our protagonist "Corky Baggott", a 41 yr. man who suffers from gout, a club foot and chronic Chron's Disease battered down from a lifetime of ridicule over "little slips here and there" so to speak. Corky is an asst, manager at a Subway and encounters Will-E, a high school dropout and a total social outcast because of a debilitating case of acne. Will-E visits Subway at precisely 1:23 PM everyday to get his usual Tuna on Sesame-Oregano and sits in the corner window seat eating it before his K-Mart stock clerk shift starts.

Anyway, without revealing too much of the plot, Corky and Will-E eventually hook up and plot to take revenge on society as a way to get back at everyone who ever made fun of them. They decide to start a Methane Lab in an abandoned warehouse, and bottle the stuff into portable canisters disguised as fire-extinguishers. Will-E discovers a secret recipe for a particularly noxious Mercaptan compound easily synthesized from In 'n Out Burgers and Nyquil which they introduce into the canisters as a potent additive. Then, by night, they penetrate commercial and government buildings and inject the canister fog into the air handlers of HVAC systems so that their victims will suffer the consequences of persistent noxious vapors upon arriving at work.

I can't really divulge anymore details because I'm in talks with AMC and Fox on production aspects, but this thing is going to be "Da Bomb".

i remember you from pbnation.

That's nice.

will there side chaining in the audio production?

Could I offer a few random character names if need be?

DIldo Dan
Brock Johnson
Issac Yakakov