Need some feedback!

[IP]

Hey if you have the time please check my experimental track here

Edit: Update4: http://soundcloud.com/cronus
(WIP)

and help me find wtf is wrong! (always should be something wrong ;p)
Note : the breakdown is big and monotonous (working on it)

at.2
+ the arp gate after the breakdown
+ new snare build arrangement
at.3
+ Kick-bass sidechain comp release fix
+ 3db for HH
+ 5db for pads
at.4
+breakdown -30sec
+kick -3db
+some audio converted to 88200 and full project running @ 88200

[pr0fane]

This actually sounds rather nice! That lead-melody is really good and has a nice drive, and the pad in the background is also quite good (but needs to be a lot louder in my opinion).

I think the bassline and kick needs some work though. It doesn't sound as punchy and crisp as it should, and the hats/percussion could also be put a bit more forward in the mix to give the track some more drive.

[IP]

Hi pr0fane!
thanks very much for your reply man!
god bless internet!
It is very hard to find someone in my place to talk about tracks etc

made some changes and added a new link @ the first post!
+ Kick-bass sidechain comp release fix (i thing now is a bit better but still needs more work)
+ 3db for HH
+ 5db for pads

[tlennon]

Sounds too much like a ripp off of Donna Summer's "I Feel Love" only without lyrics and a melody. It leaves itself open for interpretation. See what you can do with it. Even though you break the piece down at 1:00, there is no break and the tune gets mundane. Reasonably mixed but still needs work. Thanks for sharing.

[IP]

Sounds too much like a ripp off of Donna Summer's "I Feel Love"

lol ! never passed from my mind ...
the first bar of the bassline is a bit close

thanks tlennon!
the breakdown needs a lot of work to break the monotony ... plus some new sounds ahve to be introduced ...
the full track is ~8 minutes and there is one more 30s break that need work too ..

mixing is what worries me the most as after i finish with the reconstruction of my studio everything started to sound strange . I cant trust my ears like before until i "learn" the new room (this could be a nice topic on its own)