First Ableton track - Shower

[Paulo Souza]

Hi guys. First post here.

http://soundcloud.com/paulosouza/pars-shower

I'm trying to do some trance here (yeah, i know many you don't like it) but PLZ, i need some feedback!

[Paulo Souza]

C'mon guys. Plz, destroy my track

[Fluid Karma]

Hey Paulo,

no need for understatement here! I listened to your track twice, and even if I have to admit that trance is definitely not my style, you got me listening until the very end.
I especially like the mixing and the overall sound of it, it comes very genuine trancy and could be on any qualitiy trance compilation without noticing that it's a homemade track. Bravo!

Here are some additional personal opinios:

0:09 - make the drum intro a wee bit longer, this seems to have just kind of 7 1/2 bars instead of full 8 bars and will make any DJ who tries to mix that see red

2:45 - very nice build up...

4:25 - ... which maybe has not to be that long. These are almost 3 mins, a third of the track, so I personally would shorten it a bit

7:30 - nice break, but I would very much like to hear the beat come in again after that to give another uplifting and danceable part to the track before it ends. Maybe shorten the part from 4:40 to 6:40 a bit, then put the break as it is, and then - pow! - one more time to go crazy on the dancefloor.

8:06 - the transition from melody to pure drum tracks seem a bit harsh to me. If there was another danceable part before it ends (like I suggested at 7:30), I would reduce tracks while it ends until just the drums are left. Perfect for mixing.

Again, these are just my very personal opinions to an otherwise extremely well done track.
If this was your "testing of skills in trance production", I would say you passed the exam with flying colours.

Keep up the great work,

Greetings, Axel

[Paulo Souza]

Wow! Fluid Karma, thanks for your feedback!!!

I agree with you on the build up, that is still too long. Gonna work on that! Nice idea for another "danceable part", definitively gonna use that too.

Also gonna work on the intro and outro to make it mode DJ friendly

Gonna post any updates here!

[tlennon]

Since Fluid already covered most of the bases, I won't rehash them. Keep posting even if no one comments. A lot of us just love listening and not give commentary. Look at how many people are checking it out with the counter on SC. Thanks for sharing.

[Paulo Souza]

Since Fluid already covered most of the bases, I won't rehash them. Keep posting even if no one comments. A lot of us just love listening and not give commentary. Look at how many people are checking it out with the counter on SC. Thanks for sharing.

The best of it is that it's the first time ever I asked for feedback on a track. I had left this track aside, just started working on new things. The guys here made me get back to work on it. Great