Need feedback please ! Nazara - 3

[Nazara]

hello

this is my first song http://soundcloud.com/nazara/nazara-3

Can you tell me what you think when you here this song? What can I change so it's sounds mutch better?

Thanks !
Nazara

[Nazara]

hello

this is my first song http://soundcloud.com/nazara/nazara-3

Can you tell me what you think when you here this song? What can I change so it's sounds mutch better?

Thanks !
Nazara

and I know allready the outro is crap

[Rave]

The kick needs more oomph and you need to add more elements, otherwise it has potential. Keep on practicing