Need honest feedback

[crushtest]

http://soundcloud.com/sun-qin/give-it-to-me-sonic

This is my best attempt at a house track IMO, but I'm still far from where I want to be.
So any criticism is welcome regarding anything, sound quality, structure, sounds...
thanks for listening!

[jharling]

I think structurally your lacking an outro, ends too quickly for mixing imo. Your intro is pretty solid. I like the little snare fill around 4:30 more little breakdowns like that for variety would be nice. I think around 2:40 it needs to drop a bit harder im not quite sure how to accomplish this but it seems like that should be the part that really gets people dancing. Take my advice with a grain of salt though as i dont listen to much house.