New Tracks -- Rearranged

dn83 · Post by **dn83** » Mon Mar 17, 2008 6:07 pm

http://www.myspace.com/doni

dn83 · Post by **dn83** » Tue Mar 18, 2008 2:28 pm

I'm kind of at a loss right now as to which direction to take my music, so any feedback would be appreciated!

dn83 · Post by **dn83** » Wed Mar 19, 2008 1:26 am

Any suggestions/constructive criticism?

velureautonomy · Post by **velureautonomy** » Wed Mar 19, 2008 1:33 am

dither is very nice, all of the notes sound very good and the conceptual beat adds a nice depth to it. It may sound cool if after hitting the notes with your voice for a few sections, hit the same notes with a synth or another instrument as a change.

The beat in joining the yolk flows very nicely and is smooth and relaxing. Only criticism i would offer is to maybe work out a more defined synth or chorus somewhere in the song to give it a little more direction.

avatarzero · Post by **avatarzero** » Wed Mar 19, 2008 1:49 am

Doni,

A: Thanks for friend add on myspace and the reply on my post.
B: Regarding music....

"Dither" has a great guitar sound. It reminds me of my cousin just sitting on the front step, strumming on his acoustic and humming a verse from a favorite song. It feels intimate. I like the flipping pages sound on the percussion and how relatively unruly it is a first, then how it settles into the beat. I thought it needed a bit more clarity, but that could be a combination of myspace encoding and my iMac speakers.

I like the sounds on "Joiking the Yoke" but I felt like it was missing one element. I was being lead to another land by the drums and then instead I just got to see it from a distance. It's still is a complete thought, but the sentence lacks an adjective or something. Just my two cents.

Cheers!

- Bryan

polyslax · Post by **polyslax** » Wed Mar 19, 2008 2:11 am

Wow! I love what's going on melodically in Dither. It could use some development with other sounds imo, but great potential.

Joiking the Yoke has a cool minimal feel but there are some awkward moments with the beat, when it's on it's great. I like the tribal chant feel stuff as well. The mix needs some help tho - pretty quiet and flat right now.

You've got an interesting style going for sure, I like it!

dn83 · Post by **dn83** » Wed Mar 19, 2008 2:36 pm

Guys, thanks so much for the input. It's nice to finally have some sincere feedback.

I think I'll work on editing these tracks more, you've offered good suggestions.

Yeah, the beats in Joiking the Yolk are a bit too erratic, I'll work on it.

Thanks again!!

Spackled Bat · Post by **Spackled Bat** » Wed Mar 19, 2008 5:44 pm

I really enjoyed Dither. I love the guitar sound as well. Intimate is a good word.
Timeless is another because it sounds like it could have come from long ago.
I also liked your use of vocals. Certainly a direction worth pursuing further.

dn83 · Post by **dn83** » Thu Mar 20, 2008 2:17 pm

Spackled Bat wrote:I really enjoyed Dither. I love the guitar sound as well. Intimate is a good word.
Timeless is another because it sounds like it could have come from long ago.
I also liked your use of vocals. Certainly a direction worth pursuing further.

Thanks sooo much! It's great to hear things I never considered about a track before!

The only thing is, the instrument is supposed to be a harp, although it's a plucked/strummed instrument just like guitars, so it does sound a lot like an acoustic guitar too...is it the playing style that makes it sound more like a guitar I wonder?

Spackled Bat · Post by **Spackled Bat** » Thu Mar 20, 2008 5:20 pm

dn83 wrote:is it the playing style that makes it sound more like a guitar I wonder?

It actually does not sound like a guitar to me. I think I used that word because of avatarzero's comment.
I also didn't quite know what to call it so I just tried to stay consistent with previous posts. Guess I was just being lazy.
Either way it sounds good.

dn83 · Post by **dn83** » Sun Mar 23, 2008 2:37 am

Again, thanks for the feedback everybody! I reworked these tracks a bit more thanks to your encouragement and suggestions.

http://www.myspace.com/doni

New Tracks -- Rearranged

New Tracks -- Rearranged

Dithering

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