First track, need feedback please.

[SomaPills]

https://soundcloud.com/onsoma/n-714-space-ver-1-1

Thank you for listening.

-SomaPills

[reeloy]

...weel, i'd call it a sketch...can't see a track here....

not sure what you wanna hear....and where you wanna go....

apart from the fact that there is no reference to find for this, which is a good sign, this sketch is leading to nothing but a simple ladder arrangement with oldschool harmonies including some dissharmonic chords dropped somewhere....

but hey, for a very first sketch, at least we can say....now you started...carry on...

[SomaPills]

Thank you for the feedback, I can see where your coming from about the sketch. Is there any advice to build upon?

[reeloy]

....as i said....dunno where you wanna go...

so ask yourself....where do you wanna go?

but maybe, the big point is that there is no direction you chosse for yourself....
no reference.....means originality for sure....

how old are you?....wanna make a living with that....?

what so ever......it's a never ending trip you started....surprise yourself....

[Wietse de Wit]

I would say the chords you are using are way out of the box.
It sounds like a lot of tones are clashing.
But maybe your trying to make a point with that, you get credits for that.

My suggestion is to go and look for some chord progressions and harmonics.

Example given:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sCi-3lEefCs

[SomaPills]

Well, where I would want to go is more of a mellow song, listening to the way I arranged it. I really enjoy where I was going in the end. But with the intro I can see the crash with the direction.

How old am I? I'm 28, would I want to make a living with that. Sure. I see my self at least understanding the technology and program. Playing in house parties.

Well I hope I can be original. That's all I can ask for. Thanks for feedback thought. All the love from Southern California.

....as i said....dunno where you wanna go...

so ask yourself....where do you wanna go?

but maybe, the big point is that there is no direction you chosse for yourself....
no reference.....means originality for sure....

how old are you?....wanna make a living with that....?

what so ever......it's a never ending trip you started....surprise yourself....

[SomaPills]

I would say the chords you are using are way out of the box.
It sounds like a lot of tones are clashing.
But maybe your trying to make a point with that, you get credits for that.

My suggestion is to go and look for some chord progressions and harmonics.

Example given:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sCi-3lEefCs

Thanks, I will check out the video you send me. Yeah, I was just trying make something and the sound just became like a dark space ship area in my head. I was trying to publish it before Halloween, but took 2 weeks to get around to it. Thanks for link and feedback, mate.

[Erik Mitchell]

Yeah I also feel like there are some clashing going on. Nice sound design throughout however

[TheNobleNemesis]

Well, on first glance, I sorta feel this was done in a more on-the-cuff manner in session view. A bit more in the way of arrangement editing and being a bit more concise about your chords should go quite a way. I did like the harmonica part, and though this isn't exactly my genre, I did find it somewhat satisfying to the pallette. Good luck with your music!